Response to Feedback.

Editing:
Make shots shorter. - Not had enough time to cut/edit footage. However shots will be short with rapid transitions, which creates a typical thriller convention of suspense.

Camerawork:
Effective panning shots. - We used these to set the mysterious location.

Sound: / - None yet, however we will use lots of diegetic sound. For example foot steps. Also will will in corporate the sound of a heart beat throughout. A heartbeat for every shot/transition. Shows speed of shot.

Mise en Scene:
Good use of derelict setting. - The fog allowed us to create more suspense of the unknown, also have shots of the same setting on a bright sunny day. These shots will be used in contrast to one another.
Props helped to create curiosity.- The use of dolls creates an uneasy atmosphere. Exploring a typical thriller convention of contrasting safe and familiar things with danger.
Location is mysterious- Set in an abandoned barn. Ideal location for thriller setting. Luckily on our planned day to shoot, there was low lying fog, which was a bonus!
Props set sinister atmosphere.- As afor mentioned.

Storyline:
Could be about Kidnap?- The Storyline is about kidnap, however you never see the girl being kidnapped. Which also makes you wonder how she got there.

Narrative:
A lot of mystery.
Starts web of intrigue.
Good contrast with "the normal" and "the weird". - Typical thriller convention of using safe normal things and turning them sinister.
Shots of dolls are cool but hard to understand why they are there. - All shots currently placed out of order, however we used the dolls as a web of intrigue as to what will happen next as there is a free loose beside them for the girl?
I like the writing on the wall. - We wanted to give messages to the viewer. So messages in bright/big writing emphasises the kidnappee's immense and vulnerabitily.

Needs to be edited properly. - So far cut up shots, editing comes next.
Shots needed to be shorter with quick transitions.- As afor mentioned shots will be short with rapid transitions. they will link with a diegetic sound of a heartbeat created on garage band using a drum kit.