Feedback On Roughcut

Editing:
Make shots shorter.

Camerawork:
Effective panning shots

Sound: /

Mise en Scene:
Good use of derelict setting.
Props helped to create curiosity.
Location is mysterious
Props set sinister atmosphere.

Storyline:
Could be about Kidnapp?

Narrative:
A lot of mystery.
Starts web of intrigue
Good contrast with "the normal" and "the weird".
Shots of dolls are cool but hard to understand why they are there.
I like the writing on the wall.

Needs to be edited properly.
Shots needed to be shorter with quick transitions.